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Action required You are now required to meet with your Program Coordinator/Leader or Academic Coordinator within 10 working days of the date of this email to develop a study and support plan tailored to help you succeed in your studies. Please contact your Program Coordinator/Leader or Academic Coordinator to schedule your appointment or for further information.	What do I need to do? You must meet with Mr Samuel Brown, your Program Coordinator by 17 July 2017. Together, you can develop a study and support plan that will help you succeed in your studies. Please contact Mr Brown on samuelbrown@federation.edu.au or 03 xxxx xxxx to make an appointment. If you need more information, contact the student support service on <provide contact details>.
Through the framework, we provide a range of uniquely designed support programs, activities and opportunities that enhance the learning and developmental experience for on campus students. For credit to be approved towards a program there are many factors which need to be taken into consideration and each case is assessed on an individual basis. The reason your credit application was deemed unsuccessful was due to <insert reason here>.	Make the most of your time on campus with our unique support programs, activities and opportunities, specifically designed for you. We assess every application for credit individually and consider many factors. Your credit application was not successful because <insert reason here>.
Please note you are not required to pay fees at the time of enrolment. An invoice for your higher education fees will be forwarded to you shortly after you complete your enrolment. Just a quick reminder that the University offers a range of scholarships bursaries and financial support for students to apply for. For more information just go to the scholarships page on the website: http://federation.edu.au/ current-students/assistance-support-and-services/scholarships	You don’t need to pay fees when you enrol. We will send you an invoice for your higher education fees. Remember, you can apply online for a range of scholarships, bursaries and financial support.
Our Customer Service Team is available 9am – 5pm, Monday to Friday on 1800 333 864, alternatively we can call you. Click here to request a call	Call our Customer Service Team on 1800 333 864 during business hours or ask us to call you.
Hi [name], You are not enrolled in classes for Semester 2 Our records indicate that you have classes in your shopping cart which have not been finalised. As classes are quickly filling up it’s important to finalise your enrolment for Semester 2. Please note our records are current as of [date]. If you have finalised your enrolment in the last 24 hours please disregard this reminder.	Dear [name], Don’t miss out on Semester 2 classes On [date] you had classes in your online shopping cart that weren’t finalised. Classes are filling up quickly. If you haven’t already finished your enrolment, do it soon to make sure you don’t miss out.
Email subject: Summer course information Dear Students Please find attached the list of courses running over Summer. The attached flyers have the dates listed and we hope you will have access to enrol in the Student Centre from Monday 5th October. These course will only run if there are sufficient number of students enrolled. I have also attached a list of courses, pending approval, to run at the Partner campuses in Melbourne. These are still to be confirmed and you will need to contact the relevant campus regarding enrolment. Please feel welcome to contact me if you have any questions.	Email subject: Enrol now in a summer course Dear students, We are running lots of great courses over summer. The attached flyers list the topics, dates and venues. Some courses will only run if enough people register, so enrol early to make sure you don’t miss out. You can enrol at the Student Centre from Monday 5 October 2016. Additional courses are being run by our partner campuses in Melbourne. Please contact those campuses directly for enrolment details. If you have any questions, contact me on <insert details>.
With a personalised approach to learning that focuses on support, Federation’s innovative Bachelor of Nursing is a degree that really makes a difference. With pathways for full-time, part-time, accelerated program delivered in both a face-face as well as a flexible delivery mode, Federation provides a supportive environment for all students to begin a journey towards becoming a registered nurse. Find out more.	Do you want to make a difference? Our Bachelor of Nursing program supports you to become a registered nurse. The flexible, personalised approach to learning lets you study full-time or part-time. You may also be able to enrol in our accelerated program. The program is delivered face-to-face and in online environments. Discover more about the Bachelor of Nursing online.
Dear Belinda, Just a quick reminder with exams fast approaching From 5pm Friday 31st October until the end of the year, Res is strictly an Alcohol Free Zone Residence is first and foremost a place of study and during the important period of SWOTVAC and EXAMS all residences are alcohol free zones. During this time any behaviour that may jeopardise any resident’s quiet living environment is not permitted. This means no alcohol is to be consumed anywhere on Res, no public music, drunkenness, noise or gatherings are permitted. This is a very important time on Residence so please respect and assist all resident during this period. Don’t finish your year on Residence by risking serious penalties, fines and suspensions. Noise restrictions are relaxed from 5pm – 7pm each night but if someone asks you to turn it down, it’s too loud! Good luck with the exams and have a fantastic summer break!	Dear Belinda, Residences are about to be quiet and alcohol-free. This is a very important time of year for all students. To help everyone prepare for exams, all Federation residences will be quiet, alcohol-free zones from 5 pm Friday 31 October until the end of the year. No alcohol consumption, public music, loud noise or parties are allowed. Noise restrictions are relaxed from 5–7 pm each night, but please turn your music down if you are asked to. There are serious penalties, including fines and suspensions, for anyone who doesn’t follow these rules. Good luck with your exams and have a fantastic summer break!
Email subject: FW: Free Lunch - Subway - Students & Staff - Federation Business School - Mt Helen - Thursday 8th October - 12.30pm Dear Business Students and Staff You are invited to join us for a free subway lunch on Thursday 8th October from 12.30pm. Venue is the Business School reception area. Please rsvp to me for catering purposes. If you have already replied to me, you do not need to do so again. We hope you can attend.	Email subject: Free lunch at the Business School Dear students and staff, We would love you join us for a free Subway lunch to [celebrate the end of semester/farewell a colleague/insert purpose or occasion]. Date: Thursday 8 October Time: 12.30 pm Venue: Mt Helen Campus, Federation Business School reception area RSVP: Monday 5 October to [insert email] We’re looking forward to seeing you there.

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Action required

You are now required to meet with your Program Coordinator/Leader or Academic Coordinator within 10 working days of the date of this email to develop a study and support plan tailored to help you succeed in your studies. Please contact your Program Coordinator/Leader or Academic Coordinator to schedule your appointment or for further information.

What do I need to do?

You must meet with Mr Samuel Brown, your Program Coordinator by 17 July 2017. Together, you can develop a study and support plan that will help you succeed in your studies. Please contact Mr Brown on samuelbrown@federation.edu.au or 03 xxxx xxxx to make an appointment.

If you need more information, contact the student support service on <provide contact details>.

Through the framework, we provide a range of uniquely designed support programs, activities and opportunities that enhance the learning and developmental experience for on campus students.

For credit to be approved towards a program there are many factors which need to be taken into consideration and each case is assessed on an individual basis. The reason your credit application was deemed unsuccessful was due to <insert reason here>.

Make the most of your time on campus with our unique support programs, activities and opportunities, specifically designed for you.

We assess every application for credit individually and consider many factors. Your credit application was not successful because <insert reason here>.

Please note you are not required to pay fees at the time of enrolment. An invoice for your higher education fees will be forwarded to you shortly after you complete your enrolment.

Just a quick reminder that the University offers a range of scholarships bursaries and financial support for students to apply for. For more information just go to the scholarships page on the website: http://federation.edu.au/ current-students/assistance-support-and-services/scholarships

You don’t need to pay fees when you enrol. We will send you an invoice for your higher education fees.

Remember, you can apply online for a range of scholarships, bursaries and financial support.

Our Customer Service Team is available 9am – 5pm, Monday to Friday on 1800 333 864, alternatively we can call you.

Click here to request a call

Call our Customer Service Team on 1800 333 864 during business hours or ask us to call you.

Hi [name],

You are not enrolled in classes for Semester 2

Our records indicate that you have classes in your shopping cart which have not been finalised*. As classes are quickly filling up it’s important to finalise your enrolment for Semester 2.

*Please note our records are current as of [date]. If you have finalised your enrolment in the last 24 hours please disregard this reminder.

Dear [name],

Don’t miss out on Semester 2 classes

On [date] you had classes in your online shopping cart that weren’t finalised. Classes are filling up quickly. If you haven’t already finished your enrolment, do it soon to make sure you don’t miss out.

Email subject: Summer course information

Dear Students

Please find attached the list of courses running over Summer. The attached flyers have the dates listed and we hope you will have access to enrol in the Student Centre from Monday 5th October.

These course will only run if there are sufficient number of students enrolled.

I have also attached a list of courses, pending approval, to run at the Partner campuses in Melbourne. These are still to be confirmed and you will need to contact the relevant campus regarding enrolment.

Please feel welcome to contact me if you have any questions.

Email subject: Enrol now in a summer course

Dear students,

We are running lots of great courses over summer. The attached flyers list the topics, dates and venues. Some courses will only run if enough people register, so enrol early to make sure you don’t miss out. You can enrol at the Student Centre from Monday 5 October 2016.

Additional courses are being run by our partner campuses in Melbourne. Please contact those campuses directly for enrolment details.

If you have any questions, contact me on <insert details>.

With a personalised approach to learning that focuses on support, Federation’s innovative Bachelor of Nursing is a degree that really makes a difference.

With pathways for full-time, part-time, accelerated program delivered in both a face-face as well as a flexible delivery mode, Federation provides a supportive environment for all students to begin a journey towards becoming a registered nurse. Find out more.

Do you want to make a difference?

Our Bachelor of Nursing program supports you to become a registered nurse.

The flexible, personalised approach to learning lets you study full-time or part-time. You may also be able to enrol in our accelerated program. The program is delivered face-to-face and in online environments.

Discover more about the Bachelor of Nursing online.

Dear Belinda,

Just a quick reminder with exams fast approaching

From 5pm Friday 31st October until the end of the year, Res is strictly an Alcohol Free Zone

Residence is first and foremost a place of study and during the important period of SWOTVAC and EXAMS all residences are alcohol free zones.

During this time any behaviour that may jeopardise any resident’s quiet living environment is not permitted. This means no alcohol is to be consumed anywhere on Res, no public music, drunkenness, noise or gatherings are permitted.

This is a very important time on Residence so please respect and assist all resident during this period. Don’t finish your year on Residence by risking serious penalties, fines and suspensions.

Noise restrictions are relaxed from 5pm – 7pm each night but if someone asks you to turn it down, it’s too loud!

Good luck with the exams and have a fantastic summer break!

Dear Belinda,

Residences are about to be quiet and alcohol-free.

This is a very important time of year for all students. To help everyone prepare for exams, all Federation residences will be quiet, alcohol-free zones from 5 pm Friday 31 October until the end of the year.

No alcohol consumption, public music, loud noise or parties are allowed. Noise restrictions are relaxed from 5–7 pm each night, but please turn your music down if you are asked to. There are serious penalties, including fines and suspensions, for anyone who doesn’t follow these rules.

Good luck with your exams and have a fantastic summer break!

Email subject: FW: Free Lunch - Subway - Students & Staff - Federation Business School - Mt Helen - Thursday 8th October - 12.30pm

Dear Business Students and Staff

You are invited to join us for a free subway lunch on Thursday 8th October from 12.30pm.

Venue is the Business School reception area.

Please rsvp to me for catering purposes. If you have already replied to me, you do not need to do so again.

We hope you can attend.

Email subject: Free lunch at the Business School

Dear students and staff,

We would love you join us for a free Subway lunch to [celebrate the end of semester/farewell a colleague/insert purpose or occasion].

Date: Thursday 8 October

Time: 12.30 pm

Venue: Mt Helen Campus, Federation Business School reception area

RSVP: Monday 5 October to [insert email] We’re looking forward to seeing you there.